HM2102 – BUSINESS COMMUNICATION 2020

ACTIVITY 4: REVISING AND EDITING

Student’s Name Patrick Alexander Lloyd S. Cayna
Trainer’s Name Julienne J. Royo
Group No./Schedule Group 2 HM2102 (M W) 1:30 – 3:00
Date of Activity September 28, 2022
Score
Brief Description of Task 1. Remove the redundancy.
2. Improve the following clichés.
3. Check the correct spelling.

A. Remove the redundancy in the following.

1. Basic fundamentals ____________________________________________________
2. End result ____________________________________________________
3. Exactly the same ____________________________________________________
4. Full complete ____________________________________________________
5. Honest truth ____________________________________________________
6. Free gift ____________________________________________________
7. Important Essential ____________________________________________________
8. Necessary Requirement ____________________________________________________
9. Other Alternative ____________________________________________________
10. Looking forward to the future___________________________________________________
11. Past History ____________________________________________________
12. The solution that we would debate about the longest
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B. Improve the following clichés to make them more natural.

1. Along the line of ____________________________________________________
2. In connection with ____________________________________________________
3. As the case may be ____________________________________________________
4. As a matter of fact, ____________________________________________________
5. Due to the fact that ____________________________________________________
6. For your information ____________________________________________________
7. Under separate cover ____________________________________________________
8. We regret to inform you ____________________________________________________
9. Please be advised that ____________________________________________________
10. Meet with your approval ____________________________________________________
11. In regard to ____________________________________________________
12. Relative to ____________________________________________________
13. In due course ____________________________________________________
14. In terms of ____________________________________________________
15. This party ____________________________________________________
16. The question of ____________________________________________________
17. At this point in time ____________________________________________________
18. The fact of the matter is ____________________________________________________

C. Revise the following to achieve a simpler, clearer, and more direct expression. Delete, shorten,
rearrange, and use appropriate words.
1. According to our files, we do not have any record of having received payment.
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2. Another broad facet of external influence upon the operation of our financial institutions is
the area of interest rate and government regulation.
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3. The payroll is prepared by the secretary from the attendance records.
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4. If the occasions should arise, please do not hesitate to get in touch with us if we can be of
assistance in similar circumstances.
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D. Rewrite the following sentences and make them positive in tone.

1. We are sorry to tell you that the alternative will not be completed until Thursday.
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2. We shall have to delay sending you the shower curtains you ordered until you tell us
whether you want green or beige.
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3. We close at 5PM every day.
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4. You will never have reason to regret buying the suitcase.
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5. It is a mistake to buy a car without looking into the cost of a personal bank loan.
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6. We are sure our customers will not be unduly inconvenienced with the use of our new order
forms.
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7. You need not to worry about experiencing any further delay in getting this shipment.
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8. It is against our policy to carry regular checking account with balance under P2,000.
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