Class code: 222_71ENG210023_38

Student’s name: Huỳnh Thanh Sáng

Peer editor’s name: Ngô Lê Như Quỳnh
Date: 19/04/2023

WRITING ASSIGNMENT – LESSON 16___

Unit: 8
Topic:

2.1. Should cell phones be allowed in classrooms? Why (not)?

Here are some suggested questions:
1. What do most students use phones in the classroom for?
2. Is there any situation when the teacher requires/ allows students to use phones in
class?
3. What are the good points of students using phones in class?
4. What are the negative points of students using phones in class?

2.2. What do you prefer: team sports or individual sports? Why?

Here are some suggested questions:
1. What are some examples of team sports?
2. What are some benefits of playing team sports?
3. What are some examples of individual sports?
4. What are some benefits of playing individual sports?

 1st draft

1. Their use in the classroom has been the subject of debate, in my opinion, students
should be allowed to use cell phones when necessary. Cell phones should be
allowed in the classroom. One of the main arguments in favor of allowing cell
phones in the classroom is that they can be used as a learning tool to access
educational resources. Students can use their phones to access online textbooks,
study materials, and educational apps that can enhance their learning experience.
 In addition, mobile phones can enhance student engagement through interactive
learning activities, such as quizzes and games, which can make learning fun and
engaging. Although some argue that cell phones can be used as a valuable learning
tool, however, many believe that such distractions should be banned in class.
Students can focus on them and skip the teacher's lecture. Therefore, when
necessary, teachers can let students use the phone to support them but must
control it to avoid its bad effects. In short, the use of phones during class time has
many positive effects, but still has negative effects, so we need to use it rationally.

2. There are many differences of opinion when comparing team sports and individual
sports but in my opinion team sports have more benefits. Team sports include any
sport where many people work together towards a common goal, such as football.
Team sports offer many benefits. First, they develop communication skills. Effective
communication is essential for any team to function successfully, and team sports
provide a great opportunity to practice this skill. Second, team sports promote
teamwork and cooperation. Players learn to work together to achieve a common
goal and this fosters a sense of unity. Finally, team sports promote leadership.
Players learn to take responsibility for their actions and set an example. The main
difference between individual sports and team sports is that in individual sports,
athletes compete alone so there will be some benefits as well. Because individual
sports tend to produce independent athletes, an athlete can measure his progress
by his or her achievement. In short, team sports all have their advantages that are
superior to individual sports, but depending on our needs, we can choose according
to our wishes.

 Self-assessment (checklist)
Content   Y/N   Comments/ Suggestions  
Task Response  
Is the paragraph at least 80 words?   yes     
Does the topic sentence clearly state the
yes     
writer's opinion? 
Does the paragraph have a concluding
sentence that summarizes main points and yes 
gives the writer's opinion? 
Coherence & Cohesion  
Are there one topic sentence, at least two
supporting sentences, and one concluding   yes
  
 
sentence in the paragraph?  
Are relevant examples and/or other supporting
  yes
  
details (facts or explanations) included?    
Are the supporting sentences and details
yes 
related to the topic?  
Does the paragraph follow a logical order?  yes 
Is there at least 1 transition word used to link
the sentences? (First of all, In addition, Also, In  
  
yes  
conclusion, ...)?     
Lexical Resource  
Is there any spelling error?   no     
Does the paragraph contain vocabulary specific
  yes
  
to the topic?    
Grammar Range and Accuracy  

Do verb tenses and subject-verb agree?     yes

  
 
Does the writer use correct punctuation?     yes
  
 

 Peer assessment (checklist)

Content   Y/N   Comments/ Suggestions  
Task Response  
Is the paragraph at least 80 words?   yes      
Does the topic sentence clearly state the
  yes
  
writer's opinion?   
Does the paragraph have a concluding
sentence that summarizes main points and yes 
gives the writer's opinion? 
Coherence & Cohesion  
Are there one topic sentence, at least two
supporting sentences, and one concluding   yes
  
 
sentence in the paragraph?  

Are relevant examples and/or other supporting     

details (facts or explanations) included?   yes  
Are the supporting sentences and details
yes 
related to the topic?  
Does the paragraph follow a logical order?  yes 
Is there at least 1 transition word used to link
the sentences? (First of all, In addition, Also, In   yes
  
 
conclusion, ...)?     
Lexical Resource  
Is there any spelling error?   no     
Does the paragraph contain vocabulary specific
  yes
  
to the topic?    
Grammar Range and Accuracy  
Do verb tenses and subject-verb agree?   yes      
Does the writer use correct punctuation?     yes
  
 

 Final version

1. Their use in the classroom has been the subject of debate, in my opinion, students
should be allowed to use cell phones when necessary. Cell phones should be
allowed in the classroom. One of the main arguments in favor of allowing cell
phones in the classroom is that they can be used as a learning tool to access
educational resources. Students can use their phones to access online textbooks,
study materials, and educational apps that can enhance their learning experience.
In addition, mobile phones can enhance student engagement through interactive
learning activities, such as quizzes and games, which can make learning fun and
engaging. Although some argue that cell phones can be used as a valuable learning
tool, however, many believe that such distractions should be banned in class.
Students can focus on them and skip the teacher's lecture. Therefore, when
necessary, teachers can let students use the phone to support them but must
control it to avoid its bad effects. In short, the use of phones during class has both
positive and negative effects, so we need to use them rationally. In short, the use of
phones during class time has many positive effects, but still has negative effects, so
we need to use it rationally.

2. There are many differences of opinion when comparing team sports and individual
sports but in my opinion team sports have more benefits. Team sports include any
 sport where many people work together towards a common goal, such as football.
Team sports offer many benefits. First, they develop communication skills. Effective
communication is essential for any team to function successfully, and team sports
provide a great opportunity to practice this skill. Second, team sports promote
teamwork and cooperation. Players learn to work together to achieve a common
goal and this fosters a sense of unity. Finally, team sports promote leadership.
Players learn to take responsibility for their actions and set an example. The main
difference between individual sports and team sports is that in individual sports,
athletes compete alone so there will be some benefits as well. Because individual
sports tend to produce independent athletes, an athlete can measure his progress
by his or her achievement. In short, team sports all have their advantages that are
superior to individual sports, but depending on our needs, we can choose according
to our wishes.

 Rubric for grading

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