“Some schools have restricted the use of mobile phones.

Is this a positive
development or a negative one?”

In this day and age, despite the increasingly popular use of smart devices,
some schools still have regulations on the use of mobile phones. Though
remaining some controversies, in my opinion, this will bring more good
than harm to the students.

First and foremost, if not using the mobiles, students would be able to
have more chances to interact with each other face to face. Social
interaction between students counts, however, those who spend most of
their time checking the phones will always urge to do so. As a matter of
fact, this leads to a detrimental consequence that the students will
become indifferent to what is happening around them. Moreover,
addictive and toxic contents are now all over the Internet that adversely
affect the behaviors of them, while it is tough for such a teenager to sort
out what types of information that should or should not be absorbed.

On the other hand, restrictions on mobile phone usage can help students
to develop better concentration. On using mobile devices, most of the time
students will always check on “instant” videos that last approximately 20 to
25 seconds. These chains of actions can gradually lead to the status of their
brains to be “lazy” - which means that they will be easily distracted and pay
more attention to other things rather than the lessons. Additionally, in spite
of the advantages that phones may bring about, 92% of students use their
phones for recreational purposes such as games, social media, Youtube,
etc, rather than for learning. Some studies show that students who spend
less time on the phone have a tendency to concentrate 25 to 30 minutes
longer than those who do not.

In conclusion, besides the good effects of mobile phones may bring about,
I believe that such regulations are made to make the students become
better versions of themselves. Hence, keeping the students away from the
phones for a specific amount of time is a brilliant method according to my
point of view.
The given maps illustrate modifications in the town of Kimsville in the last few decades.
Generally, what stands out from the map is that the city has undergone some decent changes
in the facilities while the only building that remains is the shopping center.

Turning into details, it is quite obvious that the city has been modernized with more and more
up-to-date facilities. First and foremost, new apartments and a football stadium were built in
place of the trees on the top and bottom left of the town respectively. In addition, they also
constructed a whole new train station right on the left of the city center.

On the other hand, the town also witnessed numerous reconstructions. Prior to the software
company being built, the factory was demolished in order to make room for it. Additionally,
opposite to the shopping center, the old cinema was knocked down to make space for a new
pub.

NOTE: also, here, regarding the tenses:

 - For the map in the past, you can use past tense
- For the map at present, you can use BOTH PRESENT PERFECT and
PRESENT SIMPLE because the results are still at present. (I’ve looked into it
more carefully after your questions. Sorry for some misinformation)

Ex: First and foremost, new apartments and a football stadium were built in place of the
trees on the top and bottom left of the town respectively => First and foremost, new
apartments and a football stadium have been built in the place of the trees on the top and
bottom left of the town respectively.
The given pictures depict how tea is manufactured as well as the procedure of
making a tea cup.

Generally, what stands out from the diagram is that there are 18 stages in the two
aforementioned processes, beginning with growing tea in India and China and ending
with drinking and enjoying a cup of tea.

At the initial stage, tea is grown in India and China. Then, tea seeds will be sowed
onto the ground and under the effects of the sunlight, the plants will be provided with
enough necessary nutritions in order to grow. Prior to being dried under the heat of
the sun, tea leaves are collected and put in baskets. Following this, they will be
packed into boxes, then loaded onto a lorry and finally delivered to the supermarket.

In order to make a cup of tea, customers need to buy tea boxes at the supermarket
and bring them home. Subsequently, water should be boiled in a kettle before being
poured into a cup with an unpacked tea bag. At this point, customers just need to
add some more milk or sugar after waiting for two minutes, after which they can
drink and enjoy a delicious hot cup of tea.
The given pictures illustrate the process of manufacturing tomato ketchup.

Generally, what stands out from the diagram is that there are 15 stages in the
aforementioned process, beginning with picking tomatoes and putting them in
baskets and ending with enjoying the ketchup with hamburger and fries.

At the initial stage, tomatoes are collected and put in baskets before being sorted
into good and bad ones. Then, all stalks and seeds will be cut out after the tomatoes
are delivered to the ketchup factory. Following this, after being put and crushed in a
container, the tomatoes will be added with some sugar, vinegar and salt in order to
create a mixture with a signature scent and taste.

This mixture, subsequently, will be boiled and left for two hours prior to being poured
into bottles. At the following step, before putting the bottles into boxes and sending
them to the supermarket by a lorry, factory workers will label the tags on each one
and quality control will be carried out. Turning to the last step, customers are able to
enjoy the ketchup with hamburgers and fries
In this day and age, in numerous nations fewer and fewer people want to become
teachers, especially in middle schools. Conventional reasons people give for not
choosing to work as a teacher include low salary, stressful working environment and
lack of fundamental modern tools in teaching. In this essay, I will mention some
urgent actions that need to be taken so as to motivate more and more talented younger
individuals to opt for teaching as a main career.

First and foremost, teachers are paid very low compared to other professions.
Mentioning Vietnam as an example, where a software developer has a source of
income that is three times higher than the amount earned by secondary staff. This, in
the long run, will definitely do more harm than good to the process of enhancement of
that teacher at work. They may suffer from the feelings of discouragement, lack of
motivation, and so on. Additionally, it is such a bitter pill to swallow that even when
they work harder, they still earn the same monthly. Hence, the most

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The given maps illustrate modifications in the Spanish city of Castellon in the last few
decades.

Generally, what stands out from the map is that the city has undergone some dramatic
changes in the facilities while the only building that remains is the university.

Turning into details, it is quite obvious that there have been some new buildings put up right
next to the port, including the cinema, bars and clubs. On top of that, on the top right of the
map, some trees were removed so as to make place for a new shopping center, which is just
above the under-constructed airport. Additionally, on the top left of the map, where there used
to be no building at all, a hall of residence was constructed.

On the other hand, the city also witnessed some reconstructions. The train station, which was
demolished in order to offer more space for the police station, was relocated to between the
university and the city center and was broadened at the same time. In addition, the old market
was moved to the middle right of the map and was also reduced in size. At the position of the
old market in 2000, a new shop was erected.
Going overseas in the era of globalization to pursue higher education has become
more familiar than ever in history. In my opinion, studying abroad, like a coin that
always has two sides, brings about both numerous good benefits and downsides.

First and foremost, students who are studying abroad will be able to broaden their
horizons in terms of knowledge and experience. Most of the time, they will choose
developed countries such as the U.S, England, Switzerland, Finland, and so on to
study in order to get access to advanced technology. Once they have such better
facilities, in tandem with having the chance to approach up-to-date curriculum,
numerous in-depth aspects in the fields they are studying will be figured out. On the
other hand, students who have finished courses overseas have a tendency to be
employed in more well-paid jobs in the future. This is quite obvious ever since
well-educated students are often welcomed by large corporations. Moreover, some
surveys have proven that students who had studied abroad earned approximately 25
to 30 percent higher income than those who did not.

On the contrary, we should not ignore the “tails” of studying in another country
beside the “heads”. Students may suffer from various types of mental illnesses. Those
can come from the feelings of homesickness or the status of being lonely for too long
because it is usually difficult to get along well with other people with different
cultural backgrounds. In addition, mental illnesses can also stem from the issue which
has become so popular recently called “racist”, which means students that come
from another country can be discriminated against by the native students because of
numerous factors regarding skin color, face shape, etc,. Those who are discriminated
against can be put under tremendous pressure by being blackmailed, feelings of
intimidation or ever worse, death threats.

In conclusion, it is undeniable that there are certain good benefits of studying abroad
including experiencing a more advanced educational system or the ability to have a
higher income in the future. However, we also should not turn a blind eye to its
disadvantages, which are detrimental and dangerous.

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The given graph depicts data of yearly incomes of three bakeries in London
over a ten-year period between 2000 and 2010.

In general, what stands out from the graph is that the income of Bernie’s Buns
and Robbie’s Bakery rose significantly, whereas the figure for Lovely Loaves
witnessed a sharp decrease over the time period covered by the graph.

Turning into details, as regards Lovely Loaves, its annual earnings fluctuated
around 90,000 pounds between 2000 and 2004. Meanwhile, the figure of
Robbie’s Bakery remained stable, while that of Bernie’s Buns doubled from
approximately 20,000 to just under 40,000 pounds. In comparison with the
income of Lovely Loaves from 2004 to 2005, which underwent a considerable
fall to around 60,000 pounds, the figures for Burnie's Buns and Robbie's
Bakery leveled off at around 55,000 and 38,000 pounds respectively.

In the second half of the decade, Bernie’s Buns’ earnings rose gradually to
just above 40,000 pounds in 2007, followed by a steady increase to around
65,000 pounds in 2010. At the same time, prior to declining to roughly 40,000
pounds in 2010, the amount of money earned by Lovely Loaves saw a
moderate fall to just under 60,000 pounds. On the other hand, there was a
significant rise in the yearly income of Robbie's Bakery which soared to over
100,000 pounds in 2010.

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The graph shows consumers’ average annual expenditure on cell phone,
national and international fixed-line and services in America between 2001
and 2010.

The graph depicts consumers’ average yearly cost on cellphone,

national and international fixed-line services in America over a nine-year
period of time between 2001 and 2010.

Generally, what stands out from the graph is that the annual expenditure
of cellphone and international fixed-line services shared an upward trend,
whereas the figure for national fixed-line witnessed a gradual fall over the time
covered by the graph.

Turning into details, as regards cell phone services, its annual cost went
up steadily from roughly 200 dollars to approximately 500 dollars in 2006.
Meanwhile, in comparison to the yearly price of international fixed-line
between 2001 and 2006, which fluctuated around 300 dollars, the figure for
national fixed-line underwent a decrease from just under 700 dollars to about
500 dollars.

Additionally, the yearly price that consumers paid for international

services leveled off at around 300 dollars, followed by a negligible rise in price
to just above 300 dollars in the last two years. On the other hand, prior to
becoming the most popular, the amount of money that consumers spent on
cell phone services grew considerably to above 700 dollars in 2010. In the
meantime, national fixed-line services’ cost went down moderately in price to
roughly 400 dollars in the second half of the time period.

The graph depicts the average amount of items sold on Saturday of two
bakeries in London in 2010.
Generally, what stands out from the graph is that the average amount of items
sold by Bernie’s Buns outnumbered Lovely Loaves with seven out of nine
products. Additionally, it is noticeable that the two bakeries shared doughnuts
as the most favorable product in common.

Turning into details, salads were the least popular in Bernie’s Buns with just
under 20 of which were sold on Saturdays, whereas toasted sandwiches in
Lovely Loaves were not as favored as the other items with just above 20.
Additionally, the second most popular items of Bernie’s Buns and Lovely
Loaves were cookies, at roughly 120, and cakes, under 80 respectively.

On the other hand, when mentioning salads, in comparison with Bernie’s

Buns’, the figure for Lovely Loaves’ was the fourth most favorite food of the
bakery, roughly above 60 and three times significantly higher than that of the
Bernie’s Buns.

FEEDBACK: your second body graph is way too short, you should add a
few more sentences.
The given chart depicts the comparison between the income when started and
after three years among careers.

Generally, what stands out from the graphs is that underground drivers earn
the most among five jobs. Additionally, no matter how much or just a little,
every career witnesses a rise in salary after three years.

Turning into details, the highest and second highest jobs at both time spots
are underground driver, at roughly 50,000 pounds and firefighter, just above
40,000 respectively. On the other hand, although nurses don’t earn as much
as other jobs, their incomes increased from a little bit higher than 15,000
pounds to just below 20,000 pounds.

In addition, the third highest income is teacher’s, which fluctuates at 30,000

pounds when started and after three years, followed by police’s salary, at
approximately 25,000 pounds.

FEEDBACK: same here, more sentences in the second body graph

 In this day and age, when life has become more fast-paced than ever, dealing with
such bad circumstances has become an indispensable part. While some people choose
to accept those scenarios, others look on the bright side and find alternative
approaches in order to make enhancements. In this essay, I will discuss both of the
aforementioned points of view.

First and foremost, on accepting a bad situation, most people have a tendency
to blame external factors. In fact, it is a different way to say, “that’s the best I can do”.
Indeed, it is acceptable to acknowledge that an outcome can be affected by many
aspects. Though some of them can be eliminated by having a proper plan, some are
just basically unpredictable - which are called “Black Swans” when it comes to a
scientific term. Additionally, people also often say that, “one step back, three steps
forward”, which is also a positive different way of thinking.

On the other hand, individuals who are on the opposite side argue that
accepting and blaming are just excuses. I can not deny the fact that we are full of
flaws, however, if we insisted on accusing other components, every of our efforts
would end up in smoke. Rather than sitting and crying over a spilt milk, I will try
harder and harder to be a better version of myself by analyzing what mistakes and
failures that I have bumped into.

In addition, unsatisfactory jobs or having a financial problem is just

contemporary, we will eventually manage them. The most pivotal thing is our mindset
- which counts. No matter how worse the situation can be, we had better move on and
see the faults as a chance for self-reflection so as to gain precious lessons. Keeping in
mind that everything is always on the go, and making mistakes is just a part of
self-development.

All in all, we will make mistakes and be in hot water along the way. Sometimes
you know that you have tried your best but the outcome shows that your efforts have
been wasted. Nonetheless, nothing is wasted, you actually have enhanced and have
accomplished some precious lessons by trial and error.