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The document discusses two potential problems with children playing less sports nowadays and suggests solutions. The two problems are that children are less active due to engaging with screens more and having increased homework. To address this, the document proposes introducing a variety of sports at school and encouraging family sports activities. Implementing these solutions could help improve children's health and behavior.

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The document discusses two potential problems with children playing less sports nowadays and suggests solutions. The two problems are that children are less active due to engaging with screens more and having increased homework. To address this, the document proposes introducing a variety of sports at school and encouraging family sports activities. Implementing these solutions could help improve children's health and behavior.

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Sample 1:

Write about the following topic.


Children nowadays are playing less and less sport and this is having a bad
effect on their health and their behavior.
Why do you think this is happening? What can we do to solve the problem?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your
knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

Studies have shown that children today do not play as much sport as they did in the
past. This is worrying because it means children are not as fit as they could be.
Therefore, it is important, for several reasons, to try to get children back to the sports
field.
Firstly, we need to understand why young people are less active nowadays.
Probably the main reason is that there are too many other exciting things to do -
there are so many attractive games to play on phones, tablets and laptops. Another
reason is that there are so many amusing video clips and movies to watch - it is not
surprising that children spend so much time looking at screens. Schoolwork is a
further reason for this change in behavior. Students today get much more homework
than their parents did. This means that they have less time available for sport.
So what can we do about the situation? Firstly, I think schools could help by
introducing students to a variety of sports. Not everyone enjoys football or tennis.
But they may find that, for example, judo, canoeing or the trampoline becomes more
exciting than a computer game. A further solution to the problem is for parents to do
sports together with their children. If sport is a regular, fun family activity, children
learn to love sport from a young age.
If schools and parents do all they can to encourage children to play sports, then the
situation will start to improve and young people will become fitter and better behaved
as a result.

Children nowadays are playing less and less sport and this is having a bad
effect on their health and their behavior.
Why do you think this is happening? What can we do to solve the problem?

Studies have shown that children today do not play as much sport as they did in the
past. This is worrying because it means children are not as fit as they could be.
Therefore, it is important, for several reasons, to try to get children back to the sports
field.
=> IDENTIFY: FOCUS- KEYWORDS => PARAPHRASE => THESIS STATEMENT
=> Template for introduction:

Topic sentence: It is true/obvious/a norm that … (paraphrase the question)


Thesis statement: This essay will first suggest that the most significant problem(s)
caused by this phenomenon (is/are N chỉ reasons … ) and then submit (N chỉ
solutions)… as the most viable/ feasible solution(s)
Ex: It is true that students are attending sports activities less frequently than
before, which is asserting negative impacts on their health status and manner.

Firstly, we need => it is crucial to understand why young people are less active
nowadays. Probably (hedging) the main reason is that there are too many other
exciting things to do. Indeed,/In other words,/ To put it differently, - there are so
many attractive games to play on phones, tablets and laptops, so Another reason is
that there are so many amusing video clips and movies to watch - it is not surprising
that children spend so much time looking at screens. Schoolwork is a further reason
for this change in behavior. Students today get much more homework than their
parents did, which. This means that they have less time available for sport.
=> Template for the problem - paragraph:

Topic sentence:
+ It is crucial/essential/important to understand why _____________________.
+ There are a number of/many/several key reasons why ______________.
+ There are a number of/many/several factors leading to the situation in which
_____________________
Eg: There are a number of factors leading to the situation in which young people
are less active nowadays.
Supporting ideas: 2 – S.EE.(R) [Statement - Explanation - Example - Result)
(1) S1: Probably the main reason is that _________________________
E/E 1: Indeed,/In other words,/ To put it differently, ______________________
(detailed analysis)
R1: Therefore, ___________
(2) S2: Another reason is that _________________________/ ________________
is a further reason for _______________.
E/E 2 + R 2: ____________________________ , which means (result)
__________________________.

So what can we do about the situation? Firstly, I think schools could help by
introducing students to a variety of sports. Not everyone enjoys partaking in popular
sports such as football or tennis, but they may find that other activities, for example,
judo, canoeing or the trampoline becomes/can become more exciting than a
computer game. A further solution to the problems is for parents to do sports
together with their children. If sport is a regular, fun family activity, children learn to
love sport from a young age.
=>Template for the solution - paragraph:
Topic sentence: Fortunately,/ However, there are some feasible/possible (khả thi)
solutions/measures that can be implemented (áp dụng)/applied to address the
problems/ improve the situation.
Supporting ideas: 2 – S.EE.(R)
(1) S1: Firstly,/ To commence with,/To begin with, I think __________ could help by
________________

E.E.R. =>___________________________, which leads to/ results in/ contribute to


_________________.
(2) S2: A further solution to the problem is/ Another solution to the problem is
__________
E.E.R. =>___________________________, which leads to/ results in/ contribute to
_________________.
If __________________, ______________________________ (potential solution)
Ex: If schools and parents do all they can to encourage children to play sports, then
the situation will start to improve, and young people will become fitter and better
behaved as a result.
=> In conclusion, + Restate thesis statement. + Recommendation/ Prediction.

Sample 2:
Write about the following topic.
With the help of technology, many people nowadays often work from home.
What problems might this cause? What can they do to solve these problems?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own
knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

Technological developments mean it is easier for employees nowadays to work from


home. While it can also lead to a number of problems, these issues might be
addressed by several feasible solutions mentioned in this essay.
Firstly, one of the problems is the lack of face-to-face contact with colleagues.
Working from home means people are far away from each other and do not work
together as often. Due to this, people may feel isolated and lonely. Another problem
is the inability to check the standard of work people do at home - it may be
difficult to manage employees effectively. Without a manager working next to
them, there are more opportunities to spend time doing things other than work. As a
result, the employees and the company might not achieve as much.
A => related to A => B
lack of face-to-face contact => do not work together => isolated and lonely
There are a number of possible solutions to these problems. One solution is to use
technology that makes it easy for employees to stay in touch. People can make
calls using programs which allow online meetings to happen in a similar way to face-
to-face meetings. This way, people will feel closer to their colleagues. Another
method to solve the problem of not being able to check an employee’s work is to ask
employees to report to their manager regularly. Most people would realize the
purpose of this and therefore make sure they complete enough work in time.
Managers can also compare different employees and how long it takes to complete
similar tasks.
=> Problem A => Solution A
In conclusion, => Restate thesis statement
In conclusion, the absence of physical interactions and the inability to track
employees’ performance are two of the most remarkable challenges of remote
working. There are possible solutions to resolve those issues, namely regular
online meetings and reports.
=> Remote working could cause several problems to both employers and
companies, which can be solved by suitable solutions.
In conclusion, although working from home can result in a number of troubles, the
methods suggested in this essay could help to resolve these issues.
In summary, working remotely has the potential to lead to several problems, but
there are possible solutions, namely using technologies and regular reporting to
address those issues.

1. How many problems does it mention? Underline them.


2. How many solutions does the writer suggest? Circle them.

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