K-D58 – 20th April 2023 – PARAPHRASING/ IDEAS/ SUPPORTING IDEAS IN IELTS WRITING.

Due date to submit your homework: 10 AM, Saturday morning (22nd April 2023).

TYPES OF ESSAY WRITING IN THE IELTS EXAM (250-300 WORDS IN 40 MINUTES)

1. Some people believe that the loss of biodiversity is considered as the main environmental
issue in our current time. However, other people claim that there are more important
environmental issues in the modern world.
➔ Discuss both these views and give your own opinion (DISCUSSION ESSAY). 40%

2. Some people believe that the loss of biodiversity is considered as the main environmental
issue in our current time.
➔ To what extent do you agree or disagree with the above statement? (ARGUMENT
ESSAY). 30%.

3. Many offenders commit more crimes after serving their first punishment (FACT).
➔ What are the most serious problems associated with the above issue and what can be
done to deal with? (PROBLEM-SOLUTION ESSAY). 10%

Repeat offenders = reoffenders = recidivist.

Commit a further offence = commit another crime = reoffend → recidivism.

4. Global warming is well-known to be one of the most serious threats that humans must face
in the 21st century, and sea levels are continuing to rise at alarming rates.
➔ What are the major causes of the above issue and what can be done to cope with?
(CAUSE-SOLUTION ESSAY) 10%.

5. The percentage of overweight children in Western society has increased by almost 20% in
the last 10 years.
➔ Discuss the causes and consequences of this disturbing trend (CAUSE-EFFECT
ESSAY). 10%
FOUR CRITERIA FOR ASSESSING AND MARKING AN IELTS ESSAY WRITING.
TR (Task Response/ Task Requirement): Writing structure/ Thesis statement/Topic sentence. 5/9
7/9
CC (Coherence and Cohesion): Logical and critical thinking. 4/9 6/9
LR (Lexical Resource): Range of vocabulary 6/9 6/9
GR (Grammar and Accuracy): Grammar – Past Tense/ Present simple Tense/ Present perfect
tense. //// Use more passive voice sentences than active voice sentences. 5/9 6/9
5+4+6+5 = 20/4 = 5.0 (4.75-5.25) 7+6+6+6=25/4 = 6.25 → 6.0 – 6.5
PARAPHRASING IN IELTS WRITING (WHY DO WE HAVE TO PARAPHRASE IN ACADEMIC
WRITING???)
Topic 1: Some people believe that parents should be responsible for teaching children how
to be good members in the society. However, other people claim that school is the place for
children to learn this.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Introduction:
It is often said that many people are drawing attention to the role of parents and school in
children’s development. In fact, there are some who hold firmly to their belief that parents
play the important role in educating children how to be good members in the society.
However, others argue convincingly that school should take the responsibility of teaching
children how to become good people in their future life. Therefore, some major points in
relation to the above issue will be addressed in the following paragraphs.

SIDE A: Parents should be responsible for teaching children how to be good members in the
society.
1. Parents play the important role in educating children how to become good members in the
society.
2. Parents should take the responsibility of children’s development.
3. Parents have the greatest contribution to the development of children in their future.
4. Parents contribute greatly to children’s development in their future life.
SIDE B: School is the place for children to learn this.
1. School plays the crucial role in educating children how to become good members in the
society.
2. School should take the responsibility of children’s development.
3. School has the greatest contribution to the development of children in their future.
4. School contributes greatly to children’s development in their future life.
Topic 2: All parents want the best opportunities for their children (FACT). Some people
believe that schools should teach children skills (SIDE A). Other people (=Others), however
claim that having a range of academic subjects is better for a child’s future (SIDE B).
SIDE A: Schools should teach children skills.
1. Children should be taught several essential skills, such as communication, problem-solving and
teamwork.
2. A number of useful skills, namely communication, problem-solving and teamwork, are well-
known to be/are considered as/ are known to be the three most important skills for the future life
of a child.

NOTE: “You/I/My parents/cousins/sisters/brothers/siblings” are not allowed to use for

supporting evidence in Ielts Writing.
…., etc,…. V.v…. can’t = cannot // doesn’t = does not.
Idea 1: Communication and problem-solving skills.
Supporting idea 1: An introverted person ---- can communicate effectively with others regardless
of age and gender by attending classes of communication and problem-solving skills in his
secondary education.
Idea 2: Teamwork
Supporting idea 2: A worker--- completed his tasks by asking and collaborating, getting along well
with other staff, whereas his staff did not finish the same duties due to a lack of ability to work with
other team members.
On the one hand, there are two primary points for people to defend the former argument.
First, it is a well-documented that communication and problem-solving skills play the
important role in supporting the future life of a child. For instance, an introverted person can
communicate with others effectively regardless of age and gender by attending classes of
communication and problem-solving skills since his secondary education. Second, there is
no doubt that teamwork is known to be an important part of working in any places in the
modern world. This is supported by the fact that a worker finished the complicated tasks by
asking and collaborating with other staff, however a different worker did not complete the
same duties due to a lack of working with other team members.
Due to = because of//// due to the fact that = because S+V.

SIDE B: Having a range of academic subjects is better for a child’s future.

Learning/studying a range of academic subjects, namely Mathematics, History and Foreign
Language is considered as the best/only way to assist/support children’s development in
their future life.
To be considered as// To be well-known to be /// To be known to be.
Examples:
1. Traffic congestion (= Traffic jams) is considered as the main problem for the crowed
cities in Vietnam.
2. Traffic congestion is well-known to be the huge problem in the crowded cities in
Vietnam.
3. Children’s obesity in Western society is known to be the huge issue for the health
care system.
4. Children’s obesity is considered as a huge issue for health care system of Western
society.

Topic 3: The growing number of overweight people is putting a strain on the health care
system in an effort to deal with the health issues involved. Some people believe that the
best way to cope with this problem is to introduce more physical education (PE) lessons in
the school’s curriculum.
The main purpose of this essay is focusing on….(WRONG WAY TO EXPRESS).
The main purpose of this essay is to focus on…(RIGHT)
The role of education is preparing the modern world for children (WRONG).
The role of education is to prepare the modern world for children (RIGHT).

1. Adding/Introducing more PE lessons in the school’s curriculum is considered as the only

way/method/solution to deal with/cope with/tackle/solve the issue of overweight people in the
current world.
2. The amount of time for PE lessons in the school’s curriculum should be added to deal with the
issue of overweight people in the modern world.
3. An increase in the hours of PE lessons should be applied/implemented in the school’s
curriculum in order to deal with the issue of overweight people in the current world.
4. Secondary schools should provide more hours of PE lessons to help their students reduce the
risk of being overweight in the future.
IDEAS & SUPPORTING IDEAS IN IELTS WRITING
Example 1: There is no denying that disabled students definitely gain their degrees in the fields
of Information Technology or Digital Marketing by online study or external study (IDEA). For
instance, approximately 10 -12% of university graduates in the field of Information Technology
Vietnam in 2020 were found to be disabled students who had to study externally by using their
computers and the Internet (SUPPORTING IDEA).

Example 2: It is a well-documented fact that culture shock is defined as the main problem for
international students when study and live in a Western country (IDEA). For example, a
Vietnamese student finds it hard to adapt/ finds it difficult to adapt/ struggles with the new
environment in Australia or in the USA since he makes his own decisions rather than ask and
follow their parents’ thoughts as he lives in his home country (SUPPORTING IDEA).

HOMEWORK
PRACTICE TEST 1:

PRACTICE TEST 2: