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1.

How to write descriptively

a) Basic:
The girl was happy
b) Sensory details:
Her eyes became bigger, her lips formed a curve, and
she smiled. She even jumped up and down while shouting “yahoo”,
expressing her happiness.
c) Adjectives & Adverbs:
Her hazelnut eyes became bigger quickly, her red lips formed a parabolic curve, and she smiled with
joy. She even jumped up and down a few times while shouting “yahoo” loudly, expressing her
happiness.
d) Diversify:
Her hazelnut eyes enlarged in an instant, her red lips formed a parabolic curve, revealing her beaming
smile. She then lifted herself from the ground several times, defying gravity for a few milliseconds,
before being pulled back down, while shouting out “ yahoo” loudly, radiating her exuberance to notify
everyone that stumbled upon her that she is indeed in the state of ecstasy.

2. My Actual SPM Essay


a) Intro
She had used the last of her savings to get to the cooking competition in the big city and was
exhilarated about it. Coming from an impoverished family, it will be the very first time she step foot
in a big city. Getting to the city was no easy feat for her, her house was located in a very remote rural
area, surrounded by nothing but thick greeneries.

b) Journey to the City


Fast forward a few days later and a lot of asking around, she eventually managed to board a train to
the city. “Ah, finally I’m on the train,” she sighed while eyeing around for a seat to provide her
comfort. However, luck was not in her favor as she boarded the train during peak time, having no
choice but to squeeze herself in the crowd like a tinned sardine. Few moments elapsed, and her luck
turned 180 degree, a free space caught her eye. Knowing that opportunity doesn’t come knocking at
the door twice, she quickly picked up her hefty belongings, hugging it in her arms, and went to the
empty spot, pushing herself against the crowd while murmuring “sorry” to everyone she came in
contact with. The seat was not fully vacant, she had no choice but to sandwiched herself in between
two lads. One of which was a young boy with an earphone on, jamming away with the music, while
another one was an older teen browsing through a newspaper. Boredom got the best of her, so she
took a peek at the newspaper the teen was reading, and something familiar came in sight. She noticed
an advertisement of a cooking competition, and soon realized that it was the cooking competition she
ought to join. Chills went down her spine, she was excited yet nervous for the cooking competition.
Doubtful thoughts flooded her mind, “Am I good enough? What if the judges don’t like my cooking?
Can I really win this?”

c) Cooking Competition Started


“Ting”, the sound of the bell surrounded the room, signaling the start of the cooking competition. She
was torn between two choices, indecisive for what to cook for the judges, should I go for what
everyone else is cooking or should I shoot a shot and make my own special dish. After deliberation,
she firmly decides to play it safe, and went for the dish everyone is making, an exquisite chicken dish.
She has always had a flair for cooking, even labelling it as her favorite pastime. “First, I will chop the
onions, then mince up the garlic into smaller bits, after that I’ll…” the steps for the recipe kept
swirling in her head, acting as a constant reminder for herself to prevent any unsolicited catastrophe.
“Step one done, step two done,… step fifteen done. Yes! All is done except for…” she uttered in a
low voice to herself while preparing for the final step, that is to pan fry the chicken. “Ah, pan frying?
Easy-peasy!” she thought. As someone who have had immense experience in cooking, pan frying
should be a piece of cake. She took out a piece of chicken breast that radiated its freshness on the
outside, and undeniable tenderness in the inside. She skillfully seasoned the chicken breast with
pinches of salt and pepper, then proceeded to place it gently on the frying pan. Acknowledging that
her final step of cooking had been carried out, her thoughts abruptly shifted away from the cooking,
and she started daydreaming the scene of her winning the competition.

d) The Plot Twist


Her daydream came to a halt when she was snapped out of it by an unforeseen smell. Her sensitive
nose picked up something peculiar yet familiar, something it had taken in before. “Wait, isn’t this the
smell of something that is burnt?” she monologized to herself, before realization struck her dreamy
mind. She was thrown for a loop when she finally realized that she had overcook her chicken and
burnt it. Everything went south from that point. “Oh no, oh no, OH NO!” she let out a disappointed
remark as anxiety started to engulf her. Her mind was racing, uneasy and uncertain how to react. She
took a few deep breathes, pulling herself together in the process. “It’s okay Jamilah, you’ve sacrificed
so much for this, you wouldn’t come so far just to easily give up!” she assured herself as confidence
and optimism surged her entire body to fight off the negativity thoughts. In a matter of seconds, she
managed to overcome this chaotic ordeal and came out with plan B! Considering the sparsity of time,
the sole option she has on the table is to prepare the special sandwich that her dear mother had taught
her.

3. Other examples
a. Happy
1) The happiness was infectious. It starts as a tingle in my finger and toes. I feel it pass through me
like a warm ocean wave, washing away the sorrow that once engulfed me.

2) Delirious joy overtook him. His relaxed nonchalant lips took shape to form a flawless curved smile,
radiating its exuberance and notifying everyone that he stumbled upon that he is indeed in the state of
ecstasy.
b. Sad
1) As much as she tried to hold it in, the grimacing pain came out like an uproar from her throat in the
form of a silent scream. The edge of her eyes swell up with tears of devastation. A single slow and
desolate tear slid down from her warm, butterscotch eyes, followed by one, and another one, until
soon, a steady stream of salty tears flowing down her pale cheeks, releasing the grief and sorrow that
has been hunted her for a perpetual amount of time.

2) All I am is sadness, every other emotion pushed from my being. I would describe my sadness like
death by a thousand paper cuts, for every time I remembered my loss it was another cut to my already
severely damaged mind. None were enough to kill me, but overtime their accumulation bled me of my
humanity that I had once had. My once gregarious and generous nature quickly took a sharp turn, and
were now gaunt and melancholy.

3) The grief and sorrow flowed through her veins and killed her mind. It was a poison to her spirit,
dulling her, demolishing off her other emotions until it was the only one that remained. It was as if
black mist had settled upon her and refused to shift, and no matter how bright or cheerful the day was
she would still be reluctant to feel the sun and listen to the bird’s chirps. For the world had lost to her
and she was trapped in her melancholic despair.

c. Shock
My face fell faster than a corpse. In that instant, my skin turning alabaster, mouth hung with lips
slightly parted and eyes were as broad as they could stretch, startled like a deer in the woods.

d. Scared
It was a frightening and ghastly sight! My heart was lodged in my throat. My legs turned to lead. My
mind convulsed. Every muscle in my body screamed at me to flee, but I remained frozen with tears of
fear welling up in my eyes.
e. Handsome
He was gifted with lush, moon shadow black hair that he groomed so carefully, radiating his
confidence. The aquiline nose complemented his prominent cheekbone. Not to mention his brownish
hazel eyes, that were orb round and darted constantly, gleaming with delight, mesmerizing anyone
that lays their eyes upon him. His wrestler’s shoulder were part of his burly and athletic physique. All
of these superior attributes were perfectly completed by his flawlessly curved smile that would reveal
a set of orderly arranged pearly white teeth, so shinny and bright that even the sun would be placed
second!

f. Beautiful
She was an exceptional lass that was gifted with a pair of glowing, muddy brown almond-shaped eye,
a cute button nose alongside a pair of enchanting dimples that would emerge on her red blushy cheeks
whenever a smile is carved on her. Her lush and long silky brunette hair and curvilinear waist
complemented her milky hue complexion and comely figure. Not to mention her angel-white teeth
that gleamed so bright, even the sun would be placed second!

4. Common words to replace

1. very (positive) = overwhelmingly, extremely, amazingly, impressively, remarkably, exceptionally


2. very (negative) = terribly, dreadfully, awfully
3. stop = came to a halt
4. fail = to no avail, be in vain
5. to be in some kind of *emotion* = *sadness* got the best of her
6. situation becomes bad = went south
7. calm down = pull myself together
8. hard work = blood, sweat and tears
9. not easy = no easy feat
10. after a while = few moments elapsed
11. see = it caught my eye, it came in sight
12. suddenly = abruptly, promptly, without warning, in a blink of an eye

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