Writing IELTS 30.9 – Pie chart, immigration, đề thi 17.

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Đề thi IELTS WRITING TASK 1 "dạng pie" ngày 17/8/2024 thi giấy

The pie charts show the reasons for immigrants to a European country
in 2009 and reasons for immigrants from a European country in 2009.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main
features and make comparisons where relevant.
Essay by Minh Quang:
The pie charts show us the reason for immigration and emigration
rates to a European country based on different causes in 2009.

In general, employment and family (matters/affairs/issues/reasons)

were the main reasons for immigration. Meanwhile, most people left
their country to pursue job opportunities.

Regarding immigration, a big share/proportion/percentage/portion of

25% arrived in/landed the country to accompany their family. Next
was those who migrated for work, accounting for 23% of the total.
There were equal shares of 15% of immigrants either in search of
work, educational purpose, or other reasons for each category
respectively. Whereas, a small/tiny 7% did not disclose their reasons
by choosing not to participate in the survey.

Conversely, according to the lower pie chart, the emigration for work
was the most compelling factor, with 38% of people leaving the
country for employment purposes. Family cause and job prospect
accounted for 15% and 13%, respectively, indicating a slight
variation. These numbers approximately doubled the 8% of emigrants
who left the country for studying abroad. Moreover, 23% of people
emigrated for other reasons, while a mere 4% did not respond to the
survey.

Furthermore/ Moreover/ Besides/ In addition,

Conversely, emigration for work was the most compelling factor
Citizens : công dân
Regarding immigration, a big problem of 25%, moved back home due
to family issues. Next are those who migrate for work, accounting for
23% of the total. There is an equal share of 15% between those who
immigrate in search of work and those who come for educational
purposes. Whereas 15% of immigrants reported other reasons for
their move, and a small 7% did not disclose their reasons by choosing
not to participate in the survey.
Tương lai: In 2040, it is forecasted/ it is likely that…/ the number
will / is going to increase
Meanwhile: trong khi đó/ Whereas: trong khi đó/ Whilst: trong khi đó/
In contrast/ By contrast: ngược lại/ Conversely: ngược lại/ On the
contrary/ On the other hand,…

On the one hand: Một mặt…On the other hand: Mặt khác

Essay by Nguyễn Tú:

The pie charts illustrate the percentage of people immigrating to and
from a European country in 2009, basing on various purposes.

Overall, accompanying family was the primary reason for immigrating

to the country whilst the majority of emigrants left the country for
having been offered definite jobs. Whereas, individuals immigrating
or emigrating without a specified reason represented the smallest
share.

Essay by Mai Tiến Đức:

(Immigration and emigration have always been a part of society that
contributes to the development of a country. There are many different
purposes for a person to leave his or her home country.) The two
charts provide information about immigration and emigration of a
European country in 2009.
Overall, through the two charts, we can see that the main reasons for
immigration were employment and family issues. Meanwhile, the
majority of people left their homeland with the desire to find a better
job to support themselves and their families.
Regarding immigration, we can see that the majority of people who
come to a foreign country were related to family issues, accounting for
a quarter of the immigration rate in this country. This rate was similar
to emigration for work, accounting for 23% of the total. These may be
talented people who have received offers from foreign companies and
come here with greater ambitions. Besides, we observe that 15% of
immigrants came here to find a job and the same goes to those who
came here for educational purposes. Meanwhile, there were also
immigrants who came here for other reasons, accounting for 15% and
about 7% of people kept it a secret by not participating in the survey.

Essay by Trang:
The given pie charts demonstrate the proportion of immigration and
emigration to a European country for different reasons in 2009.

European /j/: bán nguyên âm. A European country

An apple
University /j/. A university

Sample Essay:
Para 1: Giới thiệu biểu đồ (paraphrase lại đề bài)
The duo of pie charts shows the percentage of immigration from and
emigration to a European country basing on different reasons in 2009.

Para 2: Overall Trend, xu hướng tổng thể/ overview: lấy mốc cao nhất
và thấp nhất
From an overall perspective, accompanying family was the main
reason for immigrants to this country while the majority of emigrants
left the country for having been given definite jobs. On the other hand,
“no reason” remained the least one for both categories, with the
former of 7% and the latter of 4% respectively.

Para 3: Detail
Referring to immigrants to this European country in 2009, one quarter
of them arrived here for the purpose of accompanying families which
was the top one. A nearly similar percentage (23%) belonged to
people who embraced the “definite job” here. The numbers of
immigrants landed this country either for studying, looking for a job,
or for other reasons were the same, each of which accounted for 15%.

Para 4: Detail
Regarding emigration, the opportunity of “definite jobs” was the No.1
reason for leaving the country. More than one third of emigrants
(38%) moving out of this country for their obvious job prospect,
followed by “other reasons” (23%), “accompanying family” (15%),
“looking for a job” (13%), studying (7%), and “no reason” (4%)
respectively.

To accompany: đồng hành, đi kèm

Will you accompany me abroad
Accompanied by
The President/movie star was accompanied by the Body Guard
Followed by: theo sau
Job prospect: triển vọng việc làm.
The people who were offered definite jobs
Letter of Job Offer:
More than/ Over
To emigrate from the country, to move out of the country, to leave
country: di cư, rời khỏi
To immigrate: nhập cư/ to arrive in the country/ to come to the
country/ to harbor / to land
No.1, Number 1
The two leading economies are the US and Germany, with GDP of the
former is 3,000 billion USD and the latter is 2,000 billion USD
respectively.
The population of the top crowded/populated countries is China (),
India (), Japan () respectively.
Apple pie: bánh táo
The Mid-Autumn pie/round cake:
Triangle: tam giác. Triangle of Love: tình tay 3 (Táo quân, Legend of
God Kitchen). Collocation
The duo: bộ đôi, trio: bộ 3, quartet: bộ tứ
The duo pie charts/ the duo of pie chart
The upper chart describes/ the lower chart details
According to the pie charts/ According to the upper chart/one,
From an overall perspective/In general/ Overall/ As can be clearly
seen from the charts, …/ It is evident from the charts that
In contrast/ By contrast/ Conversely / Whereas/ On the other hand
The highest, the peak (đỉnh), reach the peak of >< the least (ít nhất),
the lowest point, reach the bottom of
The top/leading/No.1 reason
Đằng sau giới từ (in, at, from, of, ….) + Noun/ V-ing
Either…or
The number of / the quantity of / the amount of
To embrace/ to grasp/ to get opportunities : đón nhận
Referring to: liên quan tới / Relating to / Related to / With regard
to/Regarding/ Concerning
To account for: chiếm bao nhiêu %/ to contribute
The number of people arriving here to look for jobs accounted for /
contributed to 13% of the total immigrants.
Sample from IELTS Đình Lực:
The given pie charts provide information on the percentage of people
immigrating to and from a European country in 2009, categorized by
different purposes.
Overall, employment and family-related reasons were the predominant
factors influencing immigration. Meanwhile, the majority of emigrants
left the country to pursue job opportunities.

In terms of immigration, a significant portion , at 25%, moved to the

country for family reasons. This was closely followed by those who
migrated for work, accounting for 23% of the total. An equal share
of 15% was observed among individuals immigrating to seek employment
and those arriving for educational purposes. Meanwhile, 15% of
immigrants cited other reasons for their move, and a minor 7% did not
disclose their reasons by choosing not to participate in the survey.
When it comes to emigration, work was the most compelling
factor, with around 40% of individuals leaving the country for employment
purposes. Family reasons and job hunting accounted for 15% and 13%,
respectively, indicating a slight variation. These figures were
approximately double the 8% of emigrants who left the country to pursue
their studies abroad. Additionally/Furthermore, 23% of people emigrated
due to various other reasons, while a mere 4% did not respond to the
survey.
(200 words)

Category (n) hạng mục/ categorize (v)

Different/ numerous/ various
Basing on various purposes.
The given charts: biểu đồ đã cho provide information on/ illustrate: minh
họa/ detail (chi tiết) / represent (biểu thị)/ show: cho thấy/ indicate: chỉ ra
Indicator (n) chỉ số
The percentage: phần trăm/ the ratio / the share: thị phần/ the proportion
To influence/ to have influence on
To pursue education/ jobs/ career: sự nghiệp
The majority of : đa số >< the minority of: thiểu số
Immigrants: arriving: nhập cư vào >< emigrants: leaving: rời khỏi
Meanwhile/ Whereas/ Whilst,/ On the other hand/
Predominant factors: nhân tố chính, nhân tố chủ đạo
Job/ employment
Accompanying family/ family-related reason
Reasons/ purposes
In terms of/ Relating to/ Related to…
Significant/ major/ fundamental/main (a)
Portion: khẩu phần/ share/ percentage
Work/ employment/ job
An equal share: tỷ lệ ngang bằng / a similar ratio/ a similar percentage
To observe: quan sát, ghi nhận. The data/statistics/figures: số liệu/the
number reported/ recorded/ observed: số liệu ghi nhận/ quan sát thấy
To seek employment/ to look for a job
To cite: trích dẫn/ to report
Move (n, v)
Minor (a) thiểu số/ the least: ít nhất
To disclose: tiết lộ/ to reveal: tiết lộ, to report

When it comes to/ Referring to: Đề cập tới

The compelling factor: nhân tố hấp dẫn nhất / thuyết phục nhất
Around/ approximately/ roughly/ about: Khoảng, xấp xỉ
Variation (n) sự biến động. To indicate a slight variation: cho thấy biến
động nhỏ.
To double: gấp đôi. It doubled/ It was as twice as
Mere/ just/ only (a) chỉ
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Sample Essay from IELTS Tutor:

The pie charts illustrate the reasons for immigration to and from a
European country in 2009.

Overall, accompanying family or loved ones was the primary reason

for immigrating to the country, whereas definite employment was the
main factor driving people to leave. Notably, very few individuals
cited no specific reason for their migration in either direction.

To begin with, 25% of those immigrating to the European country did

so to join family or loved ones, making it the leading reason, followed
closely by definite employment at 23%. The pursuit of a new job,
education, and other miscellaneous reasons each accounted for 15%.
Meanwhile, only 7% of individuals moved without a clear motive.

In contrast, the most significant reason for leaving the country was
definite employment, which made up 38%. Other miscellaneous
reasons were next at 23%, followed by accompanying family or loved
ones (15%) and job-seeking (13%). Education and lack of a specific
motive were the least common reasons, at 7% and 4%, respectively.
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Sample Essay from Tuấn Nguyện: (share trên IELTS Ngọc Bách)
The pie charts illustrate the distribution of six distinct factors
influencing immigration and emigration within a European country in
2009.
Overall, the largest segments in both charts were attributed to job-
related reasons, accompanying family, and other motivations, while
the category of individuals immigrating without a specified reason
represented the smallest share.

Specifically, 23% of individuals immigrated to the country for a

confirmed opportunity, in contrast to 38% of those who emigrated for
the same reason. Notably, the pursuit of education drew an equal
percentage of immigrants to the country (13%) as it did those leaving
(7%).

Furthermore, the percentage of immigrants citing “other reasons”

stood at 15%, while those leaving the country for similar justifications
reached 23%. Conversely, the proportion of immigrants arriving to
join family members was significantly higher at 25%, compared to
15% of emigrants who reported the same reason. Lastly, the figures
for individuals immigrating to and from the country without a specific
reason were relative close, at 7% and 4% respectively.
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