Ben Ray

What do the boys like?

What are they good at?

Describe their personalities.

What other information have you found out about the boys?

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Ben

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adjectives to describe nouns that could be
sounds
grey grey

e.g. unpolished silver e.g. clouds

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adjectives to describe nouns that could be
sounds
black black

e.g. dark e.g. smoke

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Determiners
Articles

Definite Article

the
Indefinite Articles

a an
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Demonstrative

this
that
those
these
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Determiners
Possessive

his
hers
ours
yours
theirs
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 Determiners
Quantifiers
many
some
a few
several
most
one
seven
thousands of
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 Examples of determiners

lots of hers a

all many those

this every that

the his theirs

ours a dozen hundreds

several an yours

these nine some

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 Demonstrative

Possessive
Types of Determiners

Quantifiers
Articles

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 Types of Determiners
ANSWERS
Articles Demonstrative
a this
an these
the those
that

Quantifiers Possessive
lots of ours

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all hers
several his
many theirs
every yours

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a dozen
nine
hundreds
some

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 barbed wire
(use a determiner)

(insert an adjective)

(insert a prepositional phrase)

Write a sentence

explosion
(use a determiner)

(insert an adjective)

(insert a prepositional phrase)

Write a sentence

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 ground
(use a determiner)

(insert an adjective)

(insert a prepositional phrase)

Write a sentence

(own suggestion)

(use a determiner)

(insert an adjective)

(insert a prepositional phrase)

Write a sentence

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 barbed wire
+ determiner
+ 2 adjectives
+ prepositional phrase

completed sentence

trenches
+ determiner
+ 2 adjectives
+ prepositional phrase

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completed sentence

trees
+ determiner

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+ 2 adjectives
+ prepositional phrase

completed sentence

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 shadows
+ determiner
+ 2 adjectives
+ prepositional phrase

completed sentence

sky
+ determiner
+ 2 adjectives
+ prepositional phrase

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(own suggestion)
+ determiner

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+ 2 adjectives
+ prepositional phrase

completed sentence

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What are the flowers doing?

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What are the trees doing?

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 What is the tree doing?

What are the butterflies doing?

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 What is the spider doing?

What are the clouds doing?

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What is happening?

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 barricades

aerodrome

artillery

front line

trench foot

conscription

shell shock

no man’s land

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 barricades
There were barricades of sand and stone surrounding the
entrance to the shelter.

aerodrome
The military planes departed from the aerodrome.

artillery
It took half a dozen men to be able to fire the artillery.

front line
He had been deployed to the front line at the Battle of
the Somme.

trench foot
Many soldiers unfortunately suffered with trench foot in
the First World War.

conscription
Conscription laws were introduced into Britain in 1916.

shell shock
Thousands of soldiers were treated for shell shock.

no man’s land
Nobody wanted to venture into no man’s land.

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 a driveway leading
an area on a beach
to the a barrier to stop or
barricades where the waves
commander’s living delay the enemy
reach land
quarters
a place where
aerodrome a bar of chocolate a small airport aircraft are
designed

the taking of

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large military guns
a small campfire photographs to be
artillery transported on
used to cook food used in an art
wheels
gallery
the line which has

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a place where two
been sown down a where soldiers
front line opposing sides fight
shirt and contains sleep at night
one another
buttons

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 a painful foot
the name of a place
military term for condition caused by
trench foot soldiers would go
army boots exposure to cold, wet
when injured and damp conditions
a law stating that
a compulsory where food is
journalists were not
conscription enrolment into one rationed as there is
allowed to write
of the armed forces not enough
about the war
soldiers landing on

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a military term illness caused by
French beaches
shell shock where shells were the emotional
couldn’t believe the
used as weapons impact of war amount of shells
an area of

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land that was
no man’s the name of a town unoccupied land
owned by only
land in France between two
women
fighting armies

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 ANSWERS

a driveway leading to the a barrier to stop or delay the an area on a beach where
barricades
commander’s living quarters enemy the waves reach land

a place where aircraft are

aerodrome a bar of chocolate a small airport
designed

a small campfire used to the taking of photographs to large military guns

artillery
cook food be used in an art gallery transported on wheels

the line which has been

a place where two opposing where the soldiers sleep at
front line sown down a shirt and
sides fight one another night
contains buttons
a painful foot condition
the name of a place soldiers

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trench foot military term for army boots caused by exposure to cold,
would go when injured
wet and damp conditions
a law stating that journalists
a compulsory enrolment where food is rationed as
conscription were not allowed to write
into one of the armed forces there is not enough
about the war

Resource 5c
soldiers landing on French
a military term where shells illness caused by the
shell shock beaches couldn’t believe the
were used as weapons emotional impact of war
amount of shells

land that was owned by only the name of a town in an area of unoccupied land
no man’s land
women France between two fighting armies

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The soldier had fallen and the soldier was now

lying on the path on the ground. The soldier was

hurt. The solder’s arm lay twisted whilst the

soldier’s face sank into ground. The ground was

muddy and the ground was cold and wet. The

soldier’s equipment had also suffered: it lay

scattered in pieces on the path. Barbed wire

wound itself around the soldier’s injured limbs,

entrapping the soldier with no intent to help the

soldier or release the soldier.

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 A version of the improved paragraph.

The soldier had fallen and was now lying

precariously on the obliterated wooden
walkway in the middle of the battlefield. The
young serviceman was hurt. His arm lay twisted
whilst his face sank into the muddy, cold and
water-logged earth. His equipment had also
suffered: it lay scattered in pieces, strewn
alongside the splintered planks of wood. Barbed
wire wound itself around the fallen comrade’s
injured limbs, entrapping the soldier with no
intent to help or release this newly-fallen victim
of war.

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How to Improve Sentences

Use expanded noun phrases

• adjectives (including colour)

• prepositional phrases
• similes

Include technical vocabulary

Create flow by

• using pronouns
• alternative noun phrases

Use personification

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 Improve these sentences.

Use expanded noun phrases. (adjectives and prepositional phrases)

The soldier fell.

Use some technical vocabulary.

The sky was dark.

Use an expanded noun phrase and some technical vocabulary.

The path was broken.

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 Improve these sentences.

The sky lit up.

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There was a loud noise.

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He fell.
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The ground was a mess.

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CAN YOU INCLUDE:

• expanded noun phrases?
• pronouns or alternative noun phrases?
• personification?

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 Improve and rewrite the paragraph below.

FEATURES TO INCLUDE tick

expanded noun phrases (adjectives, prepositional
phrases and similes)

technical vocabulary

pronouns and alternative nouns

personification

The sky was dark and then lit up. The path was hit and broke up.
Everything else was also broken. The man fell to the floor. He was hurt.

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 RULES
for using inverted commas
o Inverted commas are ONLY used around the
words spoken.

o Opening inverted commas show the start of the

spoken words.

o A capital letter follows the opening inverted

commas.

o A closing punctuation mark is used BEFORE the

closing inverted commas.

o Closing inverted commas are used after the last

spoken word.

o A reporting clause usually accompanies direct

speech.

o Reporting clauses can be used at the start or at

the end of direct speech.

o A new line is used when someone different

speaks.
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 Inverted commas prompt cards

opening closing opening closing

inverted direct inverted direct inverted
inverted
commas speech commas speech commas
commas

“ _______________ ” said ___________. “ _______________ ” said ___________.

capital closing capital closing

reporting reporting
letter punctuation letter punctuation
clause clause
mark mark

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opening closing opening closing
inverted direct inverted inverted direct inverted
commas speech commas commas speech commas

Resource 6b
“ _______________ ” said ___________. “ _______________ ” said ___________.

capital closing capital closing

reporting reporting
letter punctuation letter punctuation
clause clause
mark mark

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Make some notes about:

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• the action • sight and sounds character’s feelings
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Make some notes :

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• about the action • using different senses • on how the character feels • on what may be said
 saluted W salutid L

remembered H rememberd V

saved E saveed F

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watched R watchd M

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worried E worryed K

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 wandered wanderd A

charged T chargged B

fired H fird C

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hurtled E hurtld D

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exploded explodded F

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 shivered P shiverd J

jumped O jumpt K

hurried P huried L

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shocked P shockt M

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bent I bended Q

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U

Z
thinked
heared

digged
seed

flied

O
N
E

thought
heard

flew
saw

dug

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 U
A

K
J

beginned
bringed

sinked
gived

rised
W

O
G

R
brought

began
gave

sank
rose

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D

catched

sended
slided
W

caught

sent
slid

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 (letters in order)

present tense past tense letter present tense past tense letter

salute shock
remember bend
save hear
watch see
worry think
wander fly

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charge dig
fire give
hurtle bring
explode begin

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shiver rise
jump sink
hurry slide

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 present tense past tense letter present tense past tense letter
remember shock
watch hurry
save hear
worry bend
salute think
wander give
fire fly
charge dig

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hurtle bring
explode sink
jump slide
see begin

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shiver rise

__ __ __ __ __ __ __ __ __ __ __ __ __ __ __ __ __ __ __ __ __ __

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 letters letters
present tense past tense letter re- present tense past tense letter re-
arranged arranged
remember shock
watch hurry
save hear
worry bend
salute think
wander give
fire fly
charge dig

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hurtle bring
explode sink
jump slide
see begin

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shiver rise

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 ANSWERS
letters letters
present tense past tense letter re- present tense past tense letter re-
arranged arranged
remember remembered H W shock shocked P P
watch watched R H hurry hurried P I
save saved E E hear heard E E
worry worried E R bend bent I S
salute saluted W E think thought
wander wandered give gave W N
fire fired H T fly flew N O
charge charged T H dig dug O W

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hurtle hurtled E E bring brought
explode exploded sink sank O G
jump jumped O P slide slid W R
see saw S O begin began G O

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shiver shivered P P rise rose R W

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 Show, Don’t Tell!

His face turned white and he

clenched his teeth.

The sky turned dark and it wasn’t

long before puddles appeared on
the ground.

He charged out of the trenches,

knocking everything out of his path.

He pulled his cap over his eyes, folded

his arms and slumped to the floor.

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 Flashback example

BOOM! The ground below me shook again, followed by

bright lights that blinded me for several seconds.
Suddenly, I was engulfed by thick, black, putrid smoke.
Another explosion, more bright lights and the smell of
death overwhelmed me. I could no longer see the injured
soldier. Where had he gone? Was he still alive? Was
anyone else hurt? Adrenaline raced through my entire
body; I knew what I had to do.
The field was perilous and fraught with dangers. Each
time I tried to take a step, my feet sank deeper and
deeper into the muddy wasteland that was now ladened
with exposed tree roots, abandoned equipment and
shattered pieces of metal from the exploding bombs.
However, I kept my wits about me overcoming the next
obstacle. The twisted barbed wire hung like rows of angry
razors and I carefully prised a gap between them whilst
the sounds of machine guns echoed in my ears. My heart
was pounding and … “Incoming!” yelled a voice from
behind me, “Take cover!”

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Describe what happened (the action).

____________________________________
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__________________________________________
_______________________________________
_______________________________
___________________

Describe the scene using sight and sound.

____________________________________
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__________________________________________
_______________________________________
_______________________________
___________________

Describe how the character(s) was/were feeling.

__________________________
______________________________
_______________________________
____________________________
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Have you Have you
explained used a
what ‘Show, Don’t
happened? Tell
sentence?

Have you
described Have you
the scene written in
using sights, the past
sounds and tense?
smells?

Have you Have you

included used a new
direct paragraph
speech using for each
inverted piece of
commas? action?

Have you
Have you
included
used a Rule
how the
of Three
character(s)
example?
felt?

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 FLASHBACK WRITING PROMPTS FLASHBACK WRITING PROMPTS

Describe the action. Describe the action.

Use different senses to describe Use different senses to describe

the scene. the scene.

Include a simile. Include a simile.

Use some direct speech, Use some direct speech,

including inverted commas. including inverted commas.

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Use ‘Show, Don’t Tell to show Use ‘Show, Don’t Tell to show
how the character was feeling. how the character was feeling.

Resource 8g
Include Rule of Three sentences. Include Rule of Three sentences.

Use an adverbial of time, place Use an adverbial of time, place

and manner. and manner.

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Rule of Three (adjectives)

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Rule of Three (action)

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Rule of Three (questions)

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SURPRISES editing method
Say in head

Under breath-mumble

Read aloud

Punctuation power

Read the openers

Improve worrisome words

Say in head or aloud

Emotive and figurative check

Share with a friend

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 SURPRISES editing method SURPRISES editing method
Say in head Say in head

Under breath-mumble Under breath-mumble

Read aloud Read aloud

Punctuation power Punctuation power

Read the openers Read the openers

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Improve worrisome words Improve worrisome words

Say in head or aloud Say in head or aloud

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Emotive and figurative check Emotive and figurative check

Share with a friend Share with a friend

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 Say it in Under
your head breath-mumble
• In a muttered voice, begin to
• Rehearse the text in your head and
FEEL how the piece fits
listen to what immediately stands out.
together.
• Which sentences are you happy

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• Do any parts feel clumsy?
with?
• Does it make sense?
• Which sentences are you unhappy
with?

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 Punctuation
Read aloud power
• Is your punctuation
• Read your work aloud to
accurate?
yourself.
• Have you remembered
• Are your tenses accurate?
question marks after
• Have you written in first

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questions?
person?
• Have you used inverted
• Does your writing flow?
commas accurately?

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 Read the Improve
openers worrisome words

• Look at your sentence openers. Is • Have you included expanded noun

there enough variety? phrases by using adjectives,
• Have you used pronouns and prepositional phrases and similes?
alternative noun phrases? • Have you included some

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• Have you used an adverbial (time, personification?
place, manner) followed by a • Have you included technical

Resource 10a (v)

comma? vocabulary?

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 Say in your
head or aloud Emotive and
figurative check
• Read your work aloud to yourself.
• Have you included words and phrases
How does it sound now?
that show how colour impacts the
• Have you done enough?
setting and characters’ emotions?
• Has it improved?

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• Have you included some
• Do you need to use a dictionary to
personification?
check any spellings?
• Have you used the Rule of Three?
• Does it read like a flashback?

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 Adverbial starters

TIME
After a few seconds, Immediately,
Almost instantly, Before long,
Within minutes, Until then,
Straight away, At that point,

PLACE
Inside the trenches, On the battlefield,
Overhead, Just behind me,
Up in the sky, All around,
Across in no man’s land, Over by the trees,

MANNER
Bravely, Heroically,
Remarkably, Valiantly,
With haste, Courageously,
As quick as a flash, Fearlessly,

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 Peer Feedback

Share with
a friend
How did it
• Read it together — can you make you feel and why?

improve your work in any other

ways?

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• Is it interesting enough? Write your favourite sentence/part.

• Does it leave the reader with

Resource 10c
‘a thirst’ to know more?
What did you like about the flashback?

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