Class code: 231_DTA0590_16 & 17; 231_71ENG610063_62 & 63

Student’s name: Truong Gia Tien

Peer editor’s name: Tran Ngoc Phai
Date: October 02 & 03, 2023

WRITING ASSIGNMENT – LESSON 7

Unit 7: TABLE CHARTS

The table shows the proportions of pupils attending four secondary school types between
2000 and 2009.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons
where relevant.
Write at least 150 words.
Secondary School Attendance
2000 2005 2009
Specialist Schools 12% 11% 10%
Grammar Schools 24% 19% 12%
Voluntary-controlled Schools 52% 38% 20%
Community Schools 12% 32% 58%
(Writing Task 1 Table sample. IELTS Buddy. Retrieved 24 March 2022, from https://www.ieltsbuddy.com/writing-task-1-table-sample.html)

Task 1: Complete the outline for your essay.

PART CONTENTS VOCABULARY

Illustrates
The table illustrates how many students attended four how many + N phrase
Introduction Between / and
secondary school types between 2000 and 2009.

Generally, in the first year the percentage of high school Generally

students attending Voluntary-controlled schools was the
highest and Community schools and Specialist schools
Overview were the lowest, but by 2009 the percentage of high
school student attendance at Community schools has an
increased percentage and occupies the highest
percentage position. However, there are very few
students studying in Specialist schools.
In 2000, Voluntary-controlled Schools reach a high with Reach a high
52%. Community schools and Specialist schools have a
lower percentage of secondary school attendance at
12%.
Body 1
In addition, secondary school attendance voluntary-
controlled schools and community schools the highest in
2005 at 38% and 32%, specialist schools and grammar
schools at 11% and 19%.
In 2009, secondary school attendance specialist schools Decline
which was only 10%, which was 2% decline compared to
grammar schools.
Voluntary-controlled schools show a dramatic decline
Body 2
trend and ended up with only 20%.
Community schools had 58% students attendance in
2019.
Task 2: Write the first draft of your essay using the completed outline.

 1st draft
The table illustrates how many students attended four secondary school types between 2000 and 2009.
Generally, in the first year the percentage of high school students attending Voluntary-controlled schools was
the highest and Community schools and Specialist schools were the lowest, but by 2009 the percentage of
high school student attendance at Community schools has an increased percentage and occupies the highest
percentage position. However, there are very few students studying in Specialist schools.
In 2000, Voluntary-controlled Schools reach a high with 52%. Community schools and Specialist schools have a
lower percentage of secondary school attendance at 12%. In addition, secondary school attendance voluntary-
controlled schools and community schools the highest in 2005 at 38% and 32%, specialist schools and
grammar schools at 11% and 19%.
In 2009, secondary school attendance specialist schools which was only 10%, which was 2% decline compared
to grammar schools. Voluntary-controlled schools show a dramatic decline trend and ended up with only 20%.
Community schools had 58% students attendance in 2019.

Task 3: Check your work using the checklist below.

 Self-assessment (checklist)
Y/
Content Feedback
N
Task Achievement
Does the report contain at least 150 words? Y
Has the author paraphrased the question in the
Y
introduction?
Has the overview presented the most noticeable feature
of the table chart(s) (e.g. the highest proportion, the Y
main difference/similarity, etc.)?
Has the report covered the significant features (the
biggest/ smallest proportions, or differences/ Y
similarities)?
Coherence & Cohesion
Has the information been grouped into paragraphs
Y
clearly?
Is the report presented in a logical order? Y
Are there at least 3 transitional expressions used
Y
correctly (e.g. First, Besides, Overall, etc.)?
Lexical Resource
Has the question been paraphrased properly? Y
Does the author avoid repeating vocabulary? Y
Does the essay contain vocabulary specific to reporting
Y
tables?
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Are the sentences grammatically correct? Y
Has punctuation been used correctly? Y
Have the verb tenses and subject-verb agreement been
Y
checked?
Timing
Was the task completed within 20 minutes? Y
Task 4: Invite a friend to help check your work.
 Peer assessment (checklist)
Y/
Content Feedback
N
Task Achievement
Does the report contain at least 150 words? Y
Has the author paraphrased the question in the
Y
introduction?
Has the overview presented the most noticeable feature
of the table chart(s) (e.g. the highest proportion, the N
main difference/similarity, etc.)?
Has the report covered the significant features (the
biggest/ smallest proportions, or differences/ Y
similarities)?
Coherence & Cohesion
Has the information been grouped into paragraphs
Y
clearly?
Is the report presented in a logical order? Y
Are there at least 3 transitional expressions used
N
correctly (e.g. First, Besides, Overall, etc.)?
Lexical Resource
Has the question been paraphrased properly? Y
Does the author avoid repeating vocabulary? N
Does the essay contain vocabulary specific to reporting
Y
tables?
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Are the sentences grammatically correct? Y
Has punctuation been used correctly? Y
Have the verb tenses and subject-verb agreement been
Y
checked?
Timing
Was the task completed within 20 minutes? Y
Task 5: Write the final version of your essay in the box below.
 Final version
The table illustrates how many students attended four secondary school types between 2000 and 2009.
Generally, in the first year the percentage of high school students attending Voluntary-controlled schools was
the highest and Community schools and Specialist schools were the lowest, but by 2009 the percentage of
high school student attendance at Community schools has an increased percentage and occupies the highest
percentage position. However, there are very few students studying in specialist schools.
First, the proportion of students attending Voluntary-controlled schools reached a high level of 52%. The
lowest percentage of students enrolled in community and Specialist schools in 2000 was 12%. In addition,
attendance rates for Voluntary-controlled schools and Community schools were highest in 2005 at 38% and
32%, and for Specialist schools and Grammar schools at 11% and 19%.
However, in 2009, the attendance rate for Specialist schools was only 10%, down 2% compared to Grammar
schools. Voluntary-controlled schools trend to decrease significantly and eventually reach only 20%. But the
Community school saw a sharp increase and recorded the highest percentage of all years with 58% of students
enrolled in 2009.