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3. MODEL ESSAY EXAMPLE

The essay discusses factors beyond salary that contribute to a person's happiness and stress levels at work, emphasizing the importance of good relationships with colleagues and job satisfaction. It argues that a positive work environment and enjoyment of one's job can significantly enhance motivation and reduce stress. The conclusion reiterates that job satisfaction is crucial for feeling better at work, regardless of pay.

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3. MODEL ESSAY EXAMPLE

The essay discusses factors beyond salary that contribute to a person's happiness and stress levels at work, emphasizing the importance of good relationships with colleagues and job satisfaction. It argues that a positive work environment and enjoyment of one's job can significantly enhance motivation and reduce stress. The conclusion reiterates that job satisfaction is crucial for feeling better at work, regardless of pay.

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This is a simple essay doing the basics.

It shows the elements you should


include in your essay. See notes to right.
Grammar errors are expected – simple mistakes are serious. More complex
sentences will possibly cause errors but you will be given credit for
complex sentences (especially if used correctly!)
Vocabulary; advanced level, appropriate, idioms, phrasal verbs (ok).
Don’t write from thinking in Italian! Use language you are confident is
right.
Word count is 189 words – your essay should be about 150 words. If your
essay reads clearly, a few extra words will not matter.

3. Besides money, what factors are important in making a person feel


better or less stressed at work?
Many argue that having a high salary makes a person feel better and less Commentato [JDG1]: Refer immediately to topic of essay
title in the introduction. It focusses you on the title
stressed at work. But are there other factors that can affect your happiness in Commentato [JDG2]: Rhetorical questions are a good tool
employment? for the introduction

Being on good terms with your colleagues is one factor that helps a person feel Commentato [JDG3]: Every new paragraph needs a topic
sentence stating main idea – this gives the reader a clear
more at ease at work. It means you can work in a relaxed and convivial work ‘signpost’ of content to come.

environment. This is also advantageous to the company as long as you meet Commentato [JDG4]: Use linking demontratives to link
ideas
company goals. Petty jealousy and detrimental staff competition are main Commentato [JDG5]: Explain/give examples. Include
causes of work stress and are often counter-productive to the company. advanced vocabulary.

Job satisfaction is what many cite as being important in feeling better at work. Commentato [JDG6]: Topic sentence. This one is a cleft
sentence for focus.
Any employee that enjoys their job is likely to be highly motivated. Stress will
almost certainly be a part of their daily routine, but they will see the bigger Commentato [JDG7]: Use third person plural (even if
subject is singular such as ‘an employee). Alternative is
picture; that their job fulfils them. ‘you/your’ etc
Commentato [JDG8]: Use advanced phrases/idioms that
you know
In conclusion, I think job satisfaction is the most important factor besides Commentato [JDG9]: Give your opinion in the conclusion
and refer to what you have written in the text before. You
money. If you enjoy your job, you will look forward to going to work. No can repeat to emphasise your point.

matter how well, or badly, you are paid, that will help you feel better and less
stressed at work.

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